For this blog post, I had to “connect the parts.” After using They Say/I Say I was able to further address my essay. I highlighted my claim sentences in yellow, the points of focus in pink, and the transition sentences in blue. I also realized after re-reading my essay that I have repeated the word “focus” a lot in my essay. This specific exercise in They Say/I Say helped me realize the words that are often repetitive. I can now go back when I am editing it again, to make sure I incorporate other words besides “focus”, as there are many synonyms I can use instead.

I noticed that I have errors that can be fixed within my essay. I can improve my paper a lot, by just directing my attention on the little things. I think that if I focus on my claims, and have the proper evidence to back it up, all while incorporating a strong opinion, I will have a better written essay.

A specific paragraph I know that I will need to spend some more time working on, is my conclusion. I have some ideas about how I am going to approach it, I just have to focus on wrapping up the essay in a strong way. I know that I need to address the authors and their stance with art, as well as my own opinion. Doing that, I would have a strong conclusion and a great way to end my thoughts.