After receiving all my peer’s comments on my essay, I was really able to focus on what it is that I need to improve for my final draft. First and fore most, I need to elaborate on my topic and opinion. Seeing that everyone has their own opinions with beauty and art, I need to make sure that my opinion is equally distributed throughout my essay. It is very important for the writer to stay true to their own voice, especially if there are a lot of points and ideas that are being explained and mentioned. I believe I have great pieces of media incorporated into my text, I just really need to focus on how I can connect them to the authors as well as my opinion. The hardest part I think about having an idea is making sure it I elaborate it fully and not distract the focus. I know that I will be able to achieve all of these things, just be taking a re-look and writing down what my main points are and choosing the best quotes to back up my ideas. I believe that my peers have been of great help, and I know to reach out to my professor with any questions I have. I think one of the best ways to fix mistakes and expand thoughts is by having a peer of any kind to read and comment about the essay. You as the writer are directly placing an individual into your writing, allowing them to voice their opinion and explain the things that need work.